Wednesday, January 5, 2011

WIP Wednesday Gets Socked in the Mouth

I punched the whiny me in the head. He's lying on the bedroom floor, blubbering about life being fair. What a loser.


The rest of me is here, today, trying to teach teenagers about context clues and word analysis (stop snoring...I can hear you). I'm also squeezing a few words into my WIP, entry #2 for Write 1/Sub 1: "Delbert Kibbey's Mail Order Bride". Delbert's coworkers tell most of the story as they gossip in the break room at their office:

“There was another man in the house. Delbert ’s neighbor,” Martin said.

“And a video camera,” Randy said.

Nona punched Randy’s shoulder. “Rude. That’s not fair.”


“I didn’t make it up,” Randy said, rubbing his arm. “There were pills, too. Garth down in shipping knows a guy who knows a guy who used to sell to Delbert’s neighbor.”


“Pills?”


“Uppers. Downers. Reds and blues. The whole mess.” Randy offered a knowing nod. “I bet they’d been having a private party. Just the two of them and the camera.”


“So she was…they were...”


Randy nodded. “Seems like it.”


And Olesya the mail-order-bride seemed like such a nice...er...young lady.

6 comments:

Jeremy D Brooks said...

Uppers. Downers. Reds and blues.

That totally reminds me of reading National Lampoon when I was a kid...it was the early-mid 80s, and they would talk about these wonderful pills that sounded so nice: reds, bennies, bouncers, pink hearts, etc...it was like Lucky Charms in pill form.

Aaron Polson said...

I remember one "Say no to drugs" video in which they had a big bowl of pills. It looked like candy. I'm not sure they got that bit of marketing right...

Katey said...

Oh gosh, now I want more. Which... I guess is the point...

I have trouble punching the whiny me in the face--but sometimes a little commiseration goes a long way. Hope you're fairly dusted off. S'alright, we come back fighting most of the time.

Cate Gardner said...

Perhaps Olesya is a nice young lady, perhaps its the boys who are bad ;)

Aaron Polson said...

Katey - Of course that's the point. I just hope the editor wants more. And more. And...well, you get it.

Cate - Perhaps. Perhaps not. She's dead now, or rather un-dead, so we shall see. (Biting people is bad, right?)

Natalie L. Sin said...

Oh my!